2011年5月25日 星期三

contrasting-2

 I’m looking for an excellent English instructor for my school. Therefore, there were many people sent their resumes to me. After selecting there were still two resumes left, which were from Lynn Whitnall and Debra Fines. However, they had bothered me for a few days. Both of them are pretty good but major at different fields. Finally, I made the decision and employed the latter. It’s because the level of education of Debra is higher than Lynn. I think Debra had mastered English for she had studied three English-related Universities. In contrast, Lynn only studied Spanish which I don’t put so much emphasis on when I look for an English instructor. Besides, the employment experience of the latter is much more than the former. Based on much working experience, I’m convinced that Debra is capable of working new job and she’ll adapt to new environment faster than Lynn. What’s more, Debra’s has some publications such as English Verb Tenses is included. This is what I focus on and want to present to the audience of our school. In conclusion, I prefer the person who masters English deeply, and Debra is my ideal choice.

8 則留言:

  1. Debra is capable of working new job 這句怪怪的
    working後要加in a喔>_<

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  2. 其他的我覺得寫很棒!!專程回來補這句xd

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  3. Therefore, there were many people sent their resumes to me.
    -->兩動詞唷
    Therefore, there were many people sending
    their resumes to me.

    she had studied three English-related Universities.
    -->she had studied in three English-related Universities.

    I’m convinced that Debra is capable of working new job and she’ll adapt to new environment faster than Lynn.
    -->I’m convinced that Debra is capable of doing new job well and she’ll adapt to new environment faster than Lynn.

    c好長好長唷~打得很好唷,流暢~~

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  4. she had studied three English-related Universities.
    這句應該是studied in才對喔~

    其他好像沒什摸錯~
    十分通順喔!!!
    錯誤也很少=)
    棒~

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  5. but major at different fields
    -> but major in different fields

    the audience of our school -> 不知道為甚麼要用audience?

    其他我覺得很棒欸!! 值得多多學習~~

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  6. 第五行後面 major at different fields

    是major in...

    句子都好流暢喔~~
    你的文章都寫得很好
    羨慕........

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  7. 很流暢耶 !!!
    沒有什麼錯誤喔:)

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  8. Therefore, there were many people sent their resumes to me.(~sending~)
    she had studied three English-related Universities.(studied後面要加in喔)

    我喜歡前面原因的敘述~
    很有條理~
    可是也不會讓人感覺太過><
    good=))

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