2011年5月18日 星期三

Comparing 3

 Compared to my two cousins, Melody and Winnie, are quite similar to each other. Melody and Winnie are 10 and 8 years old respectively. Speaking of their appearance, Melody has big eyes and little mouth which just as Winnie has. Besides, they are very white and have short hair. When it comes to their figures, both them are slim and short. The former is 20 kilograms and 130 centimeter, and the latter just shorter than Melody by 2 centimeter but of the same weight. Likewise, their personalities have no obvious different. Melody is a kind of girl who is shy, quiet and polite, and Winnie has no exception. Additionally, they are easygoing and generous when you really understand them. According to above descriptions, you can more or less understand them. Though it’s hard to tell the apparent characteristics between them, but they’re worth knowing. I think whoever will like them when become their good friends. So I’m delight in being their cousin.

8 則留言:

  1. Speaking of their appearance, Melody has big eyes and little mouth which just as Winnie has. Besides, they are very white and have short hair. =>white-skinned會不會比較好
    文章很順暢~不錯喔~
    沒有甚麼比較大的文法錯誤喔~

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  2. 喜歡你寫的文章~ 用詞很棒!

    centimeter 可數唷~

    很順暢,文法運用極致,直得學習!!

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  3. 最後一句的so感覺可以改成Therefore~
    好像會更漂亮=)

    這篇十分的通順~
    感覺把上次形容人的方法也用上了!!!
    比較的部分也很明確!!!
    是一篇好作品喔=)

    不過白頭髮的小孩有點可怕XD

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  4. Speaking of their appearance-->speaking to說到~
    然後centimeter可以數喔~
    是說惠芳誤會你的意思了xd

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  5. The former is 20 kilograms and 130 centimeter, and the latter just shorter than Melody by 2 centimeter but of the same weight.
    -->少一個is~~~~The former is 20 kilograms and 130 centimeter, and the latter is just shorter than Melody by 2 centimeter but of the same weight.

    Likewise, their personalities have no obvious different.
    -->Likewise, their personalities have no obvious differences.

    So I’m delight in being their cousin.
    --> So I’m delighted in being their cousin.

    又是一篇好看的文章~~想認識他們

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  6. 倒數第四行 Though it’s hard to tell the apparent characteristics between them, but they’re worth knowing.

    though 後面不加but吧.....?
    其他的都很順暢~~

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  7. Though it’s hard to tell the apparent characteristics between them, but they’re worth knowing.
    去掉but

    這篇文章真棒 不過呢認真說起來 這樣已經不是slim 是bony了吧 BMI只有11...

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  8. Speaking of their appearance, Melody has big eyes and little mouth which just as Winnie has.
    >>> Speaking of their appearances,...

    When it comes to their figures, both them are slim and short.
    >>>both of them

    樓上的還去算BMI也太可愛了
    XDXD

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