2011年4月6日 星期三
Describing a Process - (4) The ways I reduce stress
It is needless to say that everyone may under a great pressure in certain situation, especially are students. When facing schoolwork, plenty of people out of question feel stress. Therefore, there are some good suggestions to help you reduce stress. First, you can do your homework for thirty minutes and then take a rest for ten minutes. Besides, you can watch TV, walk around, or play games with your siblings and so on during the break time. Second, you can do exercise for at least 30 minutes every day after you finish a long and tiring day at school. It will help you relax a lot and feel comfortable after you sweat. Third, you can play online games or chat with your friends through the Net. By doing so, they will distract your attention about annoying problems at school. Last but not the least, you have to hold a positive and active attitude toward challenges you are faced with. As the proverb goes, ”God helps those who help themselves. ” As long as you follow these suggestions you will overcome stress easily.
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第一行 是 may be 吧
回覆刪除stress不是形容詞吧
最後一行沒逗號唷~
你的文章都很豐富詳細,還會用到一些教到的東西讓文章看起來很有質感*ˇ*
When facing schoolwork, plenty of people out of question feel stress.
回覆刪除改成stressed
First, you can do your homework for thirty minutes and then take a rest for ten minutes.
加上by turns還不錯
哇~想到好多呢 而且這句God helps those who help themselves.結尾強而有力
especially are students=>are不用會比較順吧
回覆刪除整體來說我覺得還滿順的,沒有什麼冗詞贅字,看起來很舒服,只是我覺得讀書的時間可以再拉長一點,不然看30分鐘就休息10分鐘好像頻率會有點太頻繁了=ˇ=
其他的我覺得都寫的很好^^b
1.may under a great pressure 這句的under不能直接當動詞 要加be
回覆刪除2.especially are students->especially for students
整篇文章寫的不錯阿
回覆刪除對於如何減輕壓力的方法寫的還滿詳細的
而且還有一點教育性質
只是在休息時間看電視會看到忘記時間吧XDDD
真的是富含教育意義的一篇文章,
回覆刪除而且還引經據典!!
寫的很讚喔!!
不過十分鐘可以看什麼電視阿?!
可以再加上假日旅遊或休閒活動~
回覆刪除會更加豐富喔~~~
Secend,Third跟Besides的位子可以換一下~
會比較通順喔!!!
especially are students
回覆刪除//especially for students
整個文章很棒喔!! I like ~
論點也很清楚呢:>