My name is Xuan. There are five family members in my home, and I am included. I live in a small town of Tainan; the surroundings are very simple and quiet. I am glad that I born to my parents, for they are the best parents in the world. My father is both rigorous and benign to us. It is because he places great emphasis on our schoolwork and the development of reading. But instead of blaming my occasional bad scores, he often comforts and encourages me to study hard. Besides, when my father has free time, he sometimes takes my sisters and me to library to spend the holidays. Also, he is responsible for the whole family. He works very hard and late; besides, he never complains about the work. Moreover, he often encourages my sisters and I to study hard and to read more meaningful books in order to progress our knowledge. My father always teaches us “Never give up”, and he always holds a positive attitude toward life and it affects my personality a lot. Due to my father, I am optimistic and outgoing. Moreover, when facing the difficulties, I never feel frustrated. Rather, I take it as an opportunity to become more capable. When it comes to my lovely mother, she is second to none in my eyes. My mother takes charge of everything in my home, and she is very careful and easygoing. She is always willing to help others and never ask for rewards. From what is mentioned above, I learned a lot from my parents such as being optimistic when facing the challenges, and I always look on the bright side even if I fail what I want to achieve. The atmosphere of my family is very harmonious; therefore, I love my family very much.
I applied to Department of Applied Foreign Languages of National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior high school. It’s because I have a strong passion for languages, especially English. I’ve been learning English since I was an elementary school student. From then on, I found it is interesting to learn English. Nevertheless, I didn’t stand out on the crowd then; hence, I tried my best to strengthen my English ability for the enthusiasm and improvement. When I was a junior high school student, my English scores always on the first place in the class, but I didn’t satisfy and feel proud. I kept on learning English by listening to English songs, reading English magazines, watching movies in English, writing diary in English and so on. When I was an eight-grader, I passed the elementary level of General English Proficiency Test (GEPT). After graduating the junior high school, I chose to keep on my passion. Therefore, I applied to vocational senior high school in order to select the English as my major. In the NTCVS, I really improved my English ability a lot. The intensive English-related classes promoted me keep on listening, speaking, reading, writing English every day. Besides, I took part in a lot of contests related to English. For instance, I was selected from my class to contest the national vocabulary competition. Besides, my classmates and I were chose to perform the English story-telling in school. Moreover, I volunteered to take part in the English power point contest, and I also got a good grade. From the various competitions I had participated, I passed the intermediate of GEPT without effort. On top of that, I also join many extracurricular activities such as volleyball, basketball competition with my classmates. During the seniro high life, i leared a lot of things and became more mature. The memories in my senior high school are so wonderful and unforgetable that I will never forget.
When it comes to my interests, I think I am really active and vigorous. As the saying goes,” All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” Hence, my parents put great emphasis on schoolwork and entertainment. Besides studying, I’m fond of playing volleyball with my classmates. Not until I played it did I find it is so interesting! It’s because I love the atmosphere of teamwork and the feelings of victory. Additionally, the relationship between my classmates and me also become better and better in the volleyball contests. Apart from volleyball, basketball is also one of my favorite sports. I feel enthusiastic in the basketball contests and I always do my utmost to score on the court. Moreover, enjoying running, I practice running twice a week and so I can run faster than almost my peers; consequently, I was elected to take part in the race contests such as 100-meter race and 800-meter relay by my classmates in the sport meet. Aside from sports, I also like to practice my both Chinese and English typing abilities when I have free time. As a result, I got 72 words per minute in Chinese typing test. From what is mentioned above, I think my life is colorful and wonderful because I feel energetic every day.
Having a passion for English, I am willing to dedicate myself to learning it after I graduate from senior high school. As far as I am concerned, learning English is not only for earning high scores in school but for satisfying my desire to advance my English abilities. Hence, I hope I have opportunity to enter English Department of National Taiwan University of Science and Technology. With the wonderful facilities, exceptional teachers and competitive students there, I am convinced that I can and amass adequate abilities. With a view to entering my ideal university, I lay the breakground in my junior high life. When I was a senior high school student, I made great progress in English. As a consequence, I hope I can qualify for your university in the future.
Though learning well languagess is not so easy in a short time, I still stick to my faith that "No pain, no gain." Moreover, with my interest in English, I have confidence that I can overcome any predicament when learning it. As a result, I enjoy learning it and I hope I can become a valuable person in the foreseeable future.
2011年9月20日 星期二
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第一大段的部分,我覺得你的父親的描寫形象很鮮明,只是母親的描寫會不會有點比較少,感覺你比較著重於父親的說明~
回覆刪除From the various competitions I had participated, I passed the intermediate of GEPT "without effort".雖然你上面已經有講一大段你的英文是如何的practice,友很足夠的理由,只是without effort還是有點怪怪的感覺,我覺得把他改掉比較好=))
當然你這次寫的文章一樣是沒話說^^b
第一段書寫家人除了爸媽之外可以寫寫有關於sibling的事情:>
回覆刪除第二段敘述學校的生活寫的很仔細:>
錯誤很少喲~ good
我覺得你把你父親講的超級偉大的說!!!
回覆刪除可是相較於其他,
感覺敘述的有點太多~
school life可以說一些跟同學相處之類的~
寫的很讚耶~
而且融合成一篇真是聰明~
I am glad that I born to my parents
回覆刪除--> I am glad that I was born to my parents
progress是名詞喔~可以改成improve或是其他的
I take it as an opportunity to become more capable.這句怪怪的看不太董>"<
I were chose -->was chosen
Nevertheless, I didn’t stand out on the crowd then; hence, I tried my best to strengthen my English ability for the enthusiasm and improvement. 這段跟上面的時態不一樣喔~要一致~
All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.這是句很好的諺語~放在這邊用我覺得很棒^^
回覆刪除第三大段我覺得非常非常有條不紊~真的很棒耶~
從排球~籃球~跑步~英打中打~
每一個你都能從中學到比東西本身更重要的精神~
會讓人有想體驗和你一樣colorful 的校園生活~
彼此連接很順暢~完全不衝突~看的人也覺得很舒服~=)))
最後的一段打的很有自信喔~我覺得這個很好~
不過重點是~我看不到什麼錯誤拉>//<
...I lay the breakground in my junior high life.
回覆刪除breakground→break ground
Though learning well languagess is not so easy in a short time...
languagess→languages
看完之後覺得你的校園生活超級精采的,
可是會有種你是在寫school life的錯覺,
還是你把他融合了?!
我覺得結論寫的很棒耶~
感覺超有自信的!!!
讚拉~
I still stick to my faith that "No pain, no gain." 這句很棒耶 很有說服(?)力 讓人能想繼續往下看~
回覆刪除文章文法錯誤好少唷~